
While sliding along a thorny slope,
wid choking blindness around.
Some mugged up doors, a ray of hope,
though none unlocked I found..
I knocked out some, some voices came,
but none of them profound,
They peeped in through the broken frame,
n then they turned around..
Skidded, scraping down d height,
Hung up!, struck hard a rock,
Wid no1 around, there's yet no lyte,
Your there without a knock..
Held my hand, wiped off the tear-
helped me as I tread,
Whispered the words, I craved to hear,
M there wid u , (s)he said..
Thanx a lot for saying so,
U know not wat u gave,
-the gentle hug,d care u show,
-4 calming over the rave..
4 invoking in me the meaning again,
by having in me the trust,
4 pulling me from the force insane,
2 help me resist the thrust..
Though nothing from u, ur side arise,
so special as such 2 be done,
But ur presence behind, the urge in those eyes-
was rare like no one..
Watever it be, I need no share,
no tyme, or so extra attention!
Just a feeling dat YOU are there,
That's it n all is done...
18 december 2007, tuesday.

5 comments:
beautiful rendering of saperation anxiety. You've definatly got your work cut out for you there.
like a fever so close to the bone..
from a million light years away
you smiled at me
before i fell asleep.
Watever it be, I need no share,
no tyme, or so extra attention!
Just a feeling dat YOU are there,
That's it n all is done...
Tis real good!
Afreen :)
@ prachi, uru --
thanx...
Dear spoiltfreak,
I am so much surprised to see the sheer talent of a little girl.you are so good at words darling!!!Just keep them going and may Almighty bless you.
And I would love the renditions more if you donot use abbreviations in your compositions.They sort of put a break ..... not good!!
Much care
24th Jan Born
well m really fascinated by ur comment, i dunno y!!
newayz.. i'll try n take care of dat.. but cant really help , due 2 d habit.. newayz thanx 4 dat. :-)
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