Sunday, February 03, 2008

i heard her heart split into pieces,
cd discover her voice shrivel...
....as she reminisced her tymes wid him...
it bleeded out of d stone...
n she wept empathizing d pain he never experienced..
...he repeated to b 2gether again,
after so much denial 4m her side...
'nt realising' one more cut he makes to her heart wid every 'no'...
--''a tear trickled down my eye''--....
she's not a rock... i wondered... she's not...
she's not fire, not even wood ----but blamed ! misunderstood !...
n they who claim to b their best frenz cdnt find out..
--''my muffler was wet... wid d tears dat were supposed to be hers but spouting out of my eyes..''--.
....not a single drop 4m hers though ...
but her voice cried, squealing for help...
begging him to stop...
..... he kept on stabbing her further...
there's was no1.. n she wants no1 either
---- bt she needs one badly...
n i cant be there.... huh! m not there...
...--''n i soaked my shirt too now''--
they say, she's hard hearted..
...they say she's brutal, she's selfish, she's vicious...
i dnt knw how ryte they r wid dat ...
...all i knw is she's so n will remain to b d same till she 'explains'
n till then ...

'i like her'...

4 comments:

Prachi said...

I like the way that a few words in this poem can invoke images with depth. The way that meaning is not lost with rhyme.
this one is sheer brrilliance... esp the way u ended it... nuthin more need to be said realli....
But i hope i'll sumeday read the sequel to it..where u wud say, "She stands alone, needing no support, coz now she has it all..And iI still 'like' her!!"
:)

I feel like i've written this, no seriously!!

Anjali said...

like it post overall and liked the ending even more...

One suggestion: Full words read better than abbreviations especially in poems/ essays... they do justice to the sentences.

usmani said...

@ prachi..
well, how duz it sound if it really is.. lol!
wats d difference...

n there's gonna b dat stage too, it's supose to b ....
or mayb (unluckily) a stage wen i wd not really like her..n m truely afraid of facing dat day.. (n dat fear stops me from even knowing her better)...
.. i hope 'dat' day never cms..

usmani said...

@i me myself..
well i've got this sggestion from a lot many .. wil try for sure.. n 'll look forward to do dat.. hopefully..